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Binoy:
The Crying Pond

Written by:
Salma Akter aniqa
Razia Sultana
Md. Shariful Islam
Sharmin Sultana

Oh… today is so hot.
Rupa: Really, this summer is too hot.
Shovon: No summer can stop us to visit Rangpur.
Ratul: You are right shovon.
Mitu: At last we are going to Rangpur.
The bus was running. I with my four friends enjoyed bus Journey. I felt so thrilled because after a long time I am going to Rangpur to visit my grand papa’s house with my friends. Last time I visited Rangpur when I was so younger that I cannot remember anything. So it was my first journey to Rangpur like my friends.
We were running at eighty kilometers per hour speed. The roadside scenery was really charming; the green paddy fields, working farmers, rivers, trees beside the road, everything was very enjoyable. My friends were very excited because of the natural views of the countryside.   
It was 11am when we reached FoodVillage, a highway restaurant at Shirajgong. We took our breakfast in the hotel and again started our journey. We crossed Shirajgong and Bogra district and reached Gaibandha district. The cities were getting smaller and the villages were bigger. Whenever we looked was the green paddy field.   
The bus stopped, it was the middle of a paddy field. Supervisor of the bus informed us that the bus is unable to go because of mechanical error; it will take some time to repair the bus. So we got down from the bus, took a walk beside the bus. After a four-hour break our bus started again.
We reached Rangpur Bus stand, we are close to our destination. The sun has already sat down into the west.  The only way to go the old house is to hire a van. We hired a van and reach the house when it was dark enough. After we arrived we saw some candle lights through the old broken window. The area the house was large and concrete walled.
Many large dead trees covered the house, they stood like giants. Brown crispy leaves littered the yard and they smelled of fungus and autumnal-moisture, waiting for sunlight to dry up its ravaged and rotted beings. One lonesome banyan tree stood by the house swaying in the wind. The moon shone bright white, in the cloudless sky; it was the only source of light that could be seen for miles. Owls occasionally fluttered by overhead, their silhouettes passing over the fallen leaves. Rats are running on the ground. Unknown birds are whispering. The air was cold and numb.
Small bushes covered the entire house. The house was old fashioned land lord’s house, something broken. Small trees made their home in the broken wall. The gate was a giant wooden gate.  We knocked the gate for fifteen minuses. We were scared, will the gate open or not. Owl buzzing sound scared us more. 
The gate is opened by the caretaker. I am Ismail Mia, caretaker of this house said the man with a stick in his left hand and a lamp on the other. His voice was like an eighty years old man’s voice although he was not eighty. His white beard and white shirt made him a ghost. Completely motionless environment around the house, heavy wind made noise. My friends felt frightened, me also. The house was quite far from the main gate nearly three minutes walking path. The path was made of brick block. Many years nobody lived here except Ismail.
We entered the entire house; Ismail opened the big wooden gate with its creaking sound. This was a two storey building. A black cat was sitting beside the gate like gate keeper, its loud m-e-a-a-w sound told us do not enter.
The drawing room was big, the sofas were very old and dusty although Ismail cleaned these but still they are dirty. Some of windows glasses were broken. I looked at my grandfather’s portrait; it was scratchy and covered with spider’s web. South wall contains a tiger’s head and the north contains dear’s. We followed Ismail to go upstairs; it was made of iron and spiral shape. H-e-l-p help! Rupa Shouted, Ismail said don’t worry madam it is a mouse. Ismail was in front with a lamp and we were following him in the corridor. Ismail opened a room’s door and a bat came from the door and flew away. I was scared. Don’t afraid Rimi, many years these rooms are useless that is why they lived here. I have cleaned these for you. We entered the dark room, Ismail lit a candle. The room was big and the bed was at a side of the room. A table was beside the bed with a candle.
Rupa, Mitu and I stayed in a room and Shovon, Ratul in another. After changing dresses we got fresh and took our dinner in the dining room. Ismail arranged our curtain and told ‘Rimi do not leave the room at night.” I am leaving now see you at morning. Moonlight reaches our room through the window. The sky was clear but I saw only the leaves and branches of tree through the window.     
Goodnight Shovon, goodnight Ratul take rest, see you at morning. I told them to sleep and came back to our room for sleeping. I turn off the candle light; the room was totally dark I saw nothing except some faint moonlight on the window.
Rimi what time is it? It is midnight already I answered. I have to go the toilet Rupa said. Okay let’s go. We came downstairs and found the toilet beside the pond. It is a nice moonlit night Rupa, yes it’s really nice. Rupa came out from toilet. Rupa have you seen the pond? Oh it’s a big pond Rimi. We sat on the stairs of the pond for a while. The moon is really big and shining. The moonlight on the pond and the mild blowing air made us amazed. This type of scenery is definitely rare in the city. We are watching the pond sitting beside.
Rimi…(cold voice)
Rupa you called me?
No
Oh… I think you called me.
Again I heard someone is calling me with my name. It was a slow childlike voice. I became silent for a moment and tried to hear the call again. I heard twice Rimi.. Rimi…
I called rupa- Rupa let’s go to room.
Rupa: Please sit some more.
No Rupa please let’s go, we have to go.
We came back to the room and I was afraid. I clearly heard that someone called me and it was a child voice. But I could not share anything to Rupa.
After taking our breakfast we went out to visit the village. The village was really nice. We saw Green paddy fields, small rivers, farmers, birds, huts and so more. We came back home at noon.
We came back home, Shovon and Ratul saw the pond beside the house. The pond was big; they jumped into the pond for bathing. The water was very cold because many trees surrounded the pond. They were bathing for while. They were diving into the pond and also swimming. Shovon dive into the water suddenly he listened a baby’s crying.  He got up quickly and saw Ratul is not here. “Ratul where are you.” Here I am beside you Ratul said.
Shovon: somebody drag me into the water and I heard a baby’s crying.
Ratul: nothing happened to me like this. You are joking.
Shovon: believe me, it’s not a joke. Two hands drag me in; I am feeling pain in my legs. Wait a second.
Blood! Blood! How?
They both came to the pond side stairs and saw Shovon’s left leg was bleeding. Ratul said the pond is old dusty. May be your leg was scratched by a fish or old clutter. Leave it.
I am watching my own image into the pond water but childhood image. I am talking with child; she looks like same to me. Suddenly two hands come and drive the child into the water. The child is screaming but the cruel hands driving into more deep in the water. The child is trying to catch my hand; I am also trying to catch the child. No don’t leave please, help help No No…
I awaked; it was the last part of the night. My screaming awaked them all. They all came into my room. I told them about my nightmare, and what happened in the first night when we went to the toilet. Shovon added that noon’s accident. We all are afraid because everything happening around the pond and the crying child. I felt my body temperature was increasing.
I asked Rupa, are you listening the crying? Yes, answered rupa. Shovon said I’m also hearing the crying of a child. Ratul, me too.  We all hugged each other. Mitu was crying but no sounds came out. The volume of the baby crying was increasing which was coming from the pond side. We were unable to walk to the window and see what was happening there. Shovon is already senseless; my body temperature is increasing, the baby crying is getting louder and louder. 
“The crying child is your twin sister,” Ismail told me. She was killed by your own father because your sister was mute. And she was killed into the pond. Your father left the house but your sister is crying.

Binoy:
Rose

Written by:
Shazia Afrin
Sumaiya Naznin
Tahmina Akhter
Sanjida Parvin

It’s a sunny morning, Rose and Jack completed their breakfast, but the environment is not the usual one. Rose is as usual making coffee for Jack, but he is not interested to drink. Though they are sitting in the same table, but they are not talking to each other. Rose left the room and went to their lawn. Rose, a beautiful, charming lady, suddenly lost her all beauty, as she and Jack facing a great financial crisis because, Jack’s company had gone bankrupt. She is restless and trying to solve the problem, but she is unable to do so. The silent nature insisted her to recollect the memories, when Jack first proposed her for marriage. That was unexpected for Rose. Jack first saw her at the orphanage centre. Jack’s parent’s used to visit the orphanage for charity purpose. Jack also used to visit the orphanage along with his parents. Rose’s innocent beauty attracts him at once and he fell in love with her. He proposed Rose and the matter for Rose was kind of a dream to her. She never thought that, these things will ever come in her life. Jack’s honesty impressed her and she, too fell in love with him. When Jack informed his family about Rose and his decision to marry her, Mr & Mrs Smith totally dismissed the proposal. They told Jack that, Rose is not an appropriate girl for their family. Jack tried his best to pacify his parents but he failed and thus he left his home and soon got married to Rose. They settled in Australia, where Jack started his new business.
Thinking all these things, Rose suddenly heard that the phone is ringing and she went inside to pick up the phone. It was Jack’s friend Steve. Later that night, Jack order Rose to start packing bag, because they are leaving for Singapore to start a new business there, and Rose reluctantly agreed. She is completely devoted and dependent to his husband and trust him completely and that’s why obey his orders.
At the airport Jack hands Rose her passport and tell her that, his flight is after an hour while her flight is in two.
Rose: Aren’t we going together?
Jack: No, not this time.
Confused Rose opens her passport; she realizes that the destination on her boarding card is Jack’s parent’s residence not Singapore.
Rose: What is this?
Jack: I can not leave you alone here, so you must go back to my parents.
Without further elaborating the matter, and without knowing her wish he left the place. Rose couldn’t say anything to Jack. The announcement for Rose is being announced to get into her flight but she is sitting lifelessly and crying in the departure waiting room. Upset Rose then quickly make an urgent call to Marie and tells her everything that happened. Marie then advised her to stay here & that she will help her to get a new job and a new place to live.
Marie: You should be confident to make your own decision and being independent is not a bad idea.
Rose: Thank you Marie, for your help.
Fortunately, Rose gets a job at the airport and a new life as well.
George is a co-worker of Rose. They worked together at the airport’s shop. Soon they became friends, while Gorge has fallen love with Rose, despite knowing the fact that, she is married. But Rose still considered him as a good friend. Soon another crisis came into Rose’s life, her work permit expires and she can not get a new permit as she is marked as single. So, she went to Marie and discussed the matter.
Marie: “You should apply for a fake marriage with George, so that you can work”.
Rose: “No, I can’t do this. I must call jack”
But the phone was switched off. Rose again became sad and cannot find a solution of this problem. Hearing the decision of Rose from Marie, George respects her decision and agrees with it too.
That night, Rose was sleepless and again at a crossroads position. Rose doesn’t know what to do. She eagerly wants to stay in the city.   But later, she took a deep thought to the advice given by Marie. She realizes that George is a nice and honest guy. He helped her a lot whenever she faces any problem. While thinking these things, Rose found that it was almost morning, and she took a deep breath from the fresh air of morning. Later that day, Rose inform her friend Marie and George that she is ready for a fake marriage with Gorge and they send papers and wait for the court to send them a date, when they can get married. As time passes, Gorge eventually decides to reveal his feelings to her, as he thinks that, Jack is not a good guy as he left her all along with nothing.
     The following day, at the airport, George was busy with his work and so was Rose. Suddenly a very good looking man asks for Rose to George. George was shocked by seeing him and understands that he is Jack. Rose was inside for some work; she got the news from George and couldn’t believe her ears. She then goes to the gate of the shop where they both separated and are united.
Jack: How are you Rose? Are you fine?
Rose: yeah I’m fine, so good to see you back, can’t believe that you are infront of me.
Jack: I have settled everything there. I will take you with me this time and I will never leave you alone.
Rose was happy to hear this from Jack, what she was longing for long. But she was not completely happy by hearing this. She is trying to hide this feelings from Jack. Then Rose introduces all the people who helped her including George. Jack thanks them all for helping Rose while he was away.
Back at George’s place, George has received the court papers for Rose and his marriage date. So he went to Rose’s place, that time Rose and Jack were not at home, so he left the papers at their letter box.
In the morning, Rose was busy in preparing breakfast. Jack went out and opens the letter box, where he found a package for Rose. Jack then opens the package and its court papers. Jack didn’t understand anything, so he went to Rose.
Jack: What is this? Who George really is?
Rose: (shocked) what are talking about?
Jack: (showing the papers) I’m talking about this.
Rose: It was only for the work permit so that I can work and George helped me a lot in this matter he is really a good friend.
Jack: Why don’t you tell me about this?
Now, a confident Rose talks back.
Rose: I tried your phone but it was off. How could I inform you? You didn’t ever give me your address. I was all alone. You left me to go to Singapore. Not for a once you discussed anything about your plan. Somehow I managed everything and this is one of the part of that.
Jack:  (Anger) My situation and yours is different.
Rose: Situation! Is there a word “different” is applicable for a married couple. Just being a man, you are doing is right and as a woman everything that I do or think is wrong? I’m your better half and I have all the rights to know everything about you and you have to share everything in any case. And I’m sorry to say you failed to do so. You hurt me but I still love you and will always be.
In the mean time, George overhears all the conversations of Jack and Rose. He came to talk to Rose regarding their application and interview. But this unwanted situation created a tension on George’s mind. He thoughts that, he can sort out the problems between Jack and Rose. Without any second thought he knocks the door and enters into the house as the door was already opened. Seeing him Rose and Jack became surprised.
Rose: George….you are here??
George: I’m sorry; I know I shouldn’t interrupt you both in this way. But I heard everything, and that’s why I want to say something to Mr. Jack
Jack: looking at Jack (speechless)
George: Rose is so pretty that anyone can fall in love with her, and to tell you the truth I also like her but more than that I respect her for her honesty and her love for you. You are a fortunate man that you got Rose as your life partner. You both are truly made for each. Don’t misunderstand her. 
Jack was silently listened George and he was somehow regretting on his deeds.
Next day, at the airport Jack and George are shown on good terms and they hug each other and then Jack leaves. Jack and Rose are now on plane waiting for it to take off while a flight attendant comes in and gives Rose a bouquet of flowers. Rose then thanks Jack for giving her the flowers as they are beautiful. Jack starts laughing admitting that they are beautiful but they are not from him. Rose then realizes there is a card in the bouquet. She opens up the card where it’s expressing “Best of Luck to the strong girl”. The bouquet was in fact from George. Rose then smiles, and now leaving Melbourne to start her life a fresh with Jack.

akazad600:
 Review of the story "A Photograph"

The title of the story we are reviewing is “A Photograph.” At the time of going through the story, the title which has been given for the story seemed to us that it did not perfectly match with the story. But at the very last moment where the story near to finish, it revels to us that the story is dealing with a theme which is the mentality and attitude of higher class people never match with the mentality and attitude of the lower class people though they try to make a match. Exactly, the story developed by keeping a gap between the title and theme but at the very they become into a line.


The story has been centered on the main character Somi whose former name was Somi and his family. Somi was a girl of an aristocratic family of Dhaka city and later on she was married to her loved one Sarif who was also from the higher class.  They had a son whose name was Jitu and every day Somi used to drop her son in the school. In her way of his sons school most of the time she used to buy sticks of flower from a street child whose name was Sumon. For this reason, a kind of kind of relation developed between Somi and Sumon. If Somi would not see Sumon any day, she felt a kind of pool and pain in the deep of her heart. However, depending on this relationship, Somi brought this street child Sumon into her house from his grandfather. Somi and her husband tried to bring up sumon with the same sympathy they provide for their son Jitu. But their attitude and mentality did not match with Sumon at the end of the day as he is a street child. As the story goes on, we came to know that in fact a real relation that means a relation of blood was between Sumon and Somi. Somi was Sumon’s aunt. A sad and tragic incident which occurred before in their life made them separate from their real relation and these incidents reveled before them when Somi knew about her own identity through a photograph.

The major characters of this story are Somi and Sumon. Basically the story plotted around these two characters. There are other characters such as Jitu (son of Somi and Sarif), Sarif (Somi’s husband), Rahim (Sumon’s father, Somi’s dead brother), the old man (Somi’s grandfather, Sumon’s great grandfather) etc. It is a story of a contemporary time and it takes place in Dhaka city where any particular name is not mentioned and some parts of this story also held in a village.

The story has been narrated in the first person point of view mostly and in some cases third person narrative view is also used. The sentences of this story are simple past and present in style bur their construction is not accurate. There is also problem in choice of diction and in their spelling, grammatical arrangement. Flashback techniques have been used several times to relate the story. No dialogue has been used in the development of this story.

As the story developed, when Somi feels a kind of love and sympathy for Sumon and always engaged herself in the thought that why she thinks about Sumon and feels for him indicates the rising action of this story. It reaches in its peak when Somi discovers her real identity and the relation between her and Sumon after getting the photograph and return back Sumon again in her house and remorse for the behavior she behaved with Sumon when Sumon flee away from her house. So, at the when Somi realizes that it is only the faculty of compromising mentality and deep love helps anyone to cope with others mentality, it indicates the denouement of the story.
So, in conclusion it can be said that the story deals with an outstanding theme which will be interesting to the reader. But if the processes of writing this story would more decorated the story would be more interested. However, at end we can say that it was a good written story and it is eligible for a good mark.                 

Submitted by members of group (J)
Md. Abul kalm azad(Id.142-22-333)
Md. Symon Alam Khan(Id.142-22-332)
Satabdi Chakma(Id.142-22-334)
Rumana Islam(Id.142-22-335) 

jakir1912:
Members of group C:
A.S.M Jakir Hossain; Id:133-22-295
Md. Rakibul Islam; Id: 133-22-292
Rashna Khanam: Id: 141-22-297

Milad alam:
Title of the Story:

     The title of the following story is “Black Hole”. It is somehow matched or similar to the subject matter of the story. But sometime it seems vague and unintelligible for the readers.

Theme of the Story:

      The following story deals with or centers around social problem. And that social problem is none other than drug addiction which on the other hand is considered as a curse for any society. It creates hindrance for the development of young generation. This story basically highlights the bad impact of taking drugs and how it turns a dream into bad nightmare.
       But the basic problem of the story is that the author does not provide any possible solution of which we can certainly reduce or eradicate drug addiction from our society and endangered the future of the young generation. Because we know that writings or any piece of literary works are the most possible way to reach to the people’s heart and make them conscious about different matters.

Plot of the Story:

       The story basically centers on Himel, a young man who used to take drugs in order to forget all the worldly problems and pains caused due to the contradictory and unusual relationship of his parents. Therefore one day he left the house and start living with Nirob in Old Dhaka who will soon fly for U.S.A to join his family there. But certainly his life changes when he meets Nasa, a young beautiful who apparently looks like a foreigner and instantly fall in love to her. They pass their days happily and during the course of time they become closer to each other. But one day Nasa somehow learned about Himel’s habit of taking drugs and from that day she stopped communicating with Himel who on the other hand tries his best level to communicate with her but fails every time. One day Nasa called him for a meeting where she told Himel that from now she will stay with him. Some months later one day Nasa became senseless and therefore Himel immediately took her to the hospital where the doctor informed him that her wife is pregnant. For a moment he forgets what should he say as they haven’t married at all. So in order to give their child an identity they have decided to get married. But the story a takes new turn when Nasa became senseless again on the day of her wedding ceremony. The doctor came to Himel to inform him that Nasa gives birth to a baby boy but her condition is really very serious. So Himel immediately walks towards Nasa’s bed in order to meet her. He asked her why she did this. Then Nasa revealed a horrible truth that like Himel she too takes drug and leaves her home to feel his pain. After a few more interaction she fell into death along with the baby boy. Finally Himel starts laughing due to an enormous main.

Characters List:

    There are basically seven characters. Among them two major characters and five minor characters.They are including
a)   Himel- The protagonist of the story through which the whole action takes place. He used to take drugs to forget his pains and get relief from frustration. His life changes when Nasa came to his life. He is a dynamic character. Because certainly we have discovered a kind of evolution in his character.

b)   Nasa- The main female character of the story who looks like a foreigner when Himel first sees her. She is the love interst of Himel. Like Himel she is also a dynamic character. Because in this character we have also seen many flows.

c)   Nirob- One of Himel’s friend who rent his house to Himel when he leaves Bangladesh and went to U.S.A to join his family. He is a minor character. He is a static character.

d)   Himel’s parents- Like Nirob they are also considered as minor characters as well as static character. They used to quarrel with each other and did not properly care their son. Himel’s father has a bad habit of beating his wife.

e)   Nasa’s parents- They are also minor character of the story. Their appearance is very small but meaningful. Like himel’s parents they also did not properly take care their daughter. They are static character.

Besides these we have seen three more characters at the end of the story. They are the doctor and two of Himel’s friend who are become the witness on his wedding ceremony. They are all static character. Their appearance is so small that they are deducted from the character list.

Setting of the story:

             The story takes place Dhaka especially old Dhaka. Besides this we have also found England and U.S.A.  Most of the action takes place in the mid night and morning. Besides these there is also mentioning of some dates. Its settings are really appropriate with its story line.

Point of view of the Story:

       The story has been written from the first person point of view. Because the whole story has narrated or presented by Himel, the protagonist of the story. He basically presents or narrates the incidents that happens in his life in such a way that is truly heart touching.

Language of the Story:

       In this story the author tries to use formal English. But in some cases he creates problem regarding choosing the right diction. For instance in one point he writes
    “The doctor provides them a horrible news”.
     If he used inform or bring instead of provide then certainly it may sounds better than it really is. Besides this there is also some printing mistakes like “14t February” where the
      Symbol “H” has been missing. Moreover there is also some problem regarding capital letter and small letter. For instance the author writes

                        “Oh my god”

    Here he writes the word God on small letter which should be on capital letter. Because God reminds something superior. Overall we can say the language is free from major grammatical     problems. Therefore its attract the reader’s attention very easily.

Style of the Story

   Although the story has been written on the basis of Standard English Tradition but sometimes it breaks the laws of Standard English. Likewise during the first meeting or conversation between Nasa and Himel we have observed some informal English or slang.
For instance one example can make the matter clear to us.
                “You are from-
Moreover there is also some problems regarding punctuation marks and use of article and preposition. In some point he use punctuation mark and in some point he missed it. For example
                  “Excuse me”
Here he didn’t use any punctuation mark which is also an important matter in Standard English form.


Dialogue:

     Here the author uses a few dialogues which held between Himel and Nasa. It sounds a touch of romantic atmosphere. And the sentences are the combination of short and long sentences. For instance
               “-Excuse me.
-   Yes.
-   May I talk to you?
-   Sure, why not?
-   Hello. Am I talking with Himel?
-   Oh my God. Nasa? I can’t believe. How are you?
            The dialogues are interesting after all and well written.
 
Techniques of the Story:

                    The author highly used the flashback techniques. In some part of the story Himel   remembers past incidents or events in his life. For instance from the very beginning of the story we have seen that Himel remembers his first meeting with Nasa whom she is going to marry in the later course of the story.

Structure of the Story:

                     The following story somehow follows the structure of a typical story. Likewise it has a foreshadowing, rising action, climax, suspense, falling action and resolution. Overall it’s a complete package. In the foreshadowing we have seen that Himel describes the life he leads and his earlier situation which the run through the rising action where we have learned his relationship with Nasa. And then the climax comes when the doctor informed Himel that Nasa is pregnant. After that the falling action occurs when Nasa faint less again and gives birth to a baby boy. And finally in resolution we have learned that Nasa died along with her new born babay and leaves Himel alone for facing a lonely world.

Comment on the Story:

           Overall it’s a good story to read. It is well written though there are some lack in proper use of diction and punctuation. But certainly it touches the reader’s heart very swiftly. Because it seems the author tells a real story. Moreover it’s enjoyable to read.

Submitted by
Group-E

Nusrat Binta Abdullah: 141-22-307
MD. Asraful Alam        : 141-22-305
Jafrin Yeasmin            : 141-22-308
Mahedi Azim               : 141-22-306





 
 




     



 

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